Hanging bed description By Harrison
WALT: to use punctuation like brackets and ellipses.
WALT: describe setting
A wood crafted thing was hanging from nature and was covered with a net with whistling music in the background and a human cry. There was dark colored furniture with bright flowers on the forest floor. I could smell pine and flowers. Dampness from the misty fog was all over my body.
a great story
ReplyDeletelots of full stops
I see no mistakes
great work Harrison
From dillon
awesome powerful words in there we are working on having powerful words in our stories in I have a new post on my blog called show dont tell sentences
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